Toolbox: P.O.V.

• What three things does your character see, feel, taste, smell, hear? They have senses. Use them.
• First, second, or third tense (if one doesn't work, switch gears)
• Language in context with the point of view character
• Don't head-hop. Keep the "camera" in the point of view of one character per scene.

(sorry, I didn't have that much in my notebook this time. That's why I need your comments!)